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Phoenix
07-29-2009, 11:26 AM
I'm gonna own up and say this is my own bullshit, but you have to laugh at the pure epic fail of it. And now, without further bullshit interruptions, I give you my modern-day commentary on my really old bullshit!


It began in a dark alley,
OMG!! SUPERHERO JON MIGHT GET ROBBED!!!! RUNN!!!!

There I was fighting Sequel Police Cyborgs
You mean like the ones from Space Quest IV?

I turned my arm into a laser
You mean like Cyborg from Teen Titans?

And Zap! I blew the heads off those stupid robots, and there was silence.
Damn, I'm good!

But not for long,
JESUS! Why is it everytime I fix something it just falls apart again?

Out of the shadows comes this Huge Vampire!
Vampires. How original.

, He knocked me on the head. In addition, he took me to his layer of the undead (as in Vampires).
Note to self: learn the word "and".

Damn, we need a bridge for all this space.

After Hours of being out cold I realized I was in a huge cage with millions of people,
An underground cage with millions of people in it? Well, let's just float too.

I quickly turned on my jet boots and shouted,
DAMN THAT WAS FAST!

"Those humans are so dumb I bet that if you spared their lives they would do anything.
Yea, let's insult the thing we're protecting.

But I am not human I am a Super Hero and as A Super Hero I will not allow that."
Perhaps I'm from Krypton, or as the original quote read:

But I am not human I am a Dashonian and as A Dashonian I will not allow that."
See, add an -I to my name and suddenly I'm from a different planet. BTW, Dashopia is the earlier name for Xictillis. It supposedly had two different names before even that, in order, Dashtopia, and Dashonia.

I quickly turned my arm into a laser
Or maybe I turned into a green elephant like Beast Boy.

and zapped those vampires.
WOODEN STAKE VISION!

But wait what’s this nobody could survive a blast like that
Failure to kill the undead. Typical.

The Vampire Master laughed and said,"You are sooooooooooooo stupid a cat is smarter than you."
SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO why did that need so many Os? Also, what's with the cat? I mean, really? Dumber than a bean pole? Dumber than a flea? But no, dumber than a cat. Nice.

In addition, I quickly replied, "YOU'RE GOING TO REGET THAT."
Because I've had so much luck killing vampires before...

I turned my arm into a circular saw. In addition, said, "EAT MY DUST."
Yes, it's the ARM-SWITCH THING I got from some random dude named Brandon.

I cut through everyone of them. But they were still there,
FAIL

They got every thing they could stand on, and pulled me down from the ceiling,
Damn? No Texan vampires with lassos?

and Strapped me to a conveyor belt meant to suck the blood out of people
Like the one from Buffy?

the needles were as sharp as swords
Punctuation fail.

so, I amazingly pulled one arm out (I could have escaped)
Because here in 5-year-old land, we don't give a FUCK about the laws of physics.

but I wanted to trick them so, I pressed a button and said, "Computer ACTIVATE SHIELD 1401."
WTF is it with me and the number 1401? Seriously.

and the vampires just laughed their heads off and strapped me back in,
Because that worked so well the first time

and when I got to the needle point where it would suck the blood out of me. They stopped laughing
RANDOM PERIOD TIME!

because when the needles got to me they went down to my skin and KAPOW! The needles shattered,
Magical force field from nowhere shatters needles. Go figure.

I quickly turned on my jet boots an turned my arm into a laser once again,
Isn't it nice how I can just turn random parts of my body into whatever the hell I want?

and
POW! I blasted a hole in the selling
Did I now? What is this? A blood deal?

and made my escape to my TOP SECRET! Tree house in Mongolia (its way better then that cardboard box you got going in the backyard)
Apparently I liked that phrase: "It's way better than that cardboard box you got going in the backyard" so much when I heard it on a Cartoon Network commercial, I can't write a story with out it. And why Mongolia? India not good enough for you?

So I Flew To Mongolia To Find Out More information on Vampires anyway, I found out that vampires could be killed one of two ways number
1. Kill the Vampire by taking a Stake to its heart and driving it through (note this leaves a bunch of sawdust on the floor)
2. Using holy items such as, anointmant oil, Holy water, or a Cross.
I'm a highly intelligent being from a highly sophisticated planet, and I don't know the nature of vampires. Riiiight.

I stepped over to the radar to see what there was on it (I was going to fight the Vampires but there were giant meteors headed straight for the earth I said, “I gotta Go kick some meteor butt.”
Fuckin God. Not only did he send random meteors after me so I couldn't stop the vampires, he also made me make a run-on.

and, I was off. I took the xj710233 shuttle
The what?

to get to space I was sure I brought the EVA suit so I can use my lasers in space I reached coordinates 1853924544 and put on the EVA suit
READ: Mathematics each of a group of numbers used to indicate the position of a point, line, or plane.
That's only one number. And why the fuck would I understand what an EVA suit is?

I quickly went out side,
DAMNIT JON! DIDN'T I TELL YOU NOT TO FORGET YOUR TETHER?

and I turned my arm into a Plasma

Cannon and thought, Hmm I wonder if that would work on vampires, oh probably not
I may be wrong, but didn't I already try that on the vampires?

ZAP! Ha! Ha! Ha! That works every time. That was easy. Too easy!
YOU IDIOT!!! NOW WE'RE ALL GONNA DIE!

There was silence and out of the shadows
Because space has shadows

comes this big Riosninfinscoff
(Pronounced Rio sniff in scoff)
A WHAT?

Again with the spaces!

In addition, he knocked me out with a BIG PIECE OF METAL.

SPACEAPALOOZA!!!

After hours, I woke up in the last place you would be kidnapped to A Church. Too bad, it was a vampire blood shrine. Two vampires bit me at the same time, I began to transform into a vampire.
The magical Riosniffinscoff came all the way to space just to turn me into a vampire. And two? WTF?

I then went to see The Great Gabriel the Wizard
Because only 8-year-old me can insert random characters with no introduction.

for him to change me back. I was almost half Vampire Oh NO! He turned me back to a human (Thank God).
This great wizard turned me back into a human, even though I was originally a Dashonian. Yep.

So, I went to Brandon's Weapons Store to examine a Steak I bought one and put it on me Arm switch thing I Got from Leslie.
Oh, ok, I got the wooden stake from Brandon, I got the ARM SWITCH THING from Leslie. More random people.

And I went to the vampire layer.
Because I had too many problems finding vampires on the moon.

However, while I was going I fell into a time rip. It took me to Xenon about in Space Quest XII Vohual's Revenge II.
Damn Sequel Police.

So I jumped back in now
Damn, I'm fast!

I was in the vampire layer and I killed all the vampires and set free all of the citizens.
Go figure.

But one was still in there I said, "it's ok little girl you can come out."
Afraid to not hang around for vampire reinforcements.

So she came out. In addition, went to town.
What a little whore. Really, what did I mean by this?

But one thousand more vampires came out and I kicked their butts and we all lived happily ever after (For Now)
What a lovely (and blunt) ending.

And if you think that's bullshit, just wait till you hear It Began, which happens to be the second "book", that really doesn't qualify as a short story, that I wrote.

WhiteRaven
07-29-2009, 05:19 PM
Where is this 'literature' you promised?

Anyway, I think we've all written dumbass things as kids, hell, I wrote about why parrots rule the universe.

Phoenix
07-29-2009, 05:32 PM
Where is this 'literature' you promised?

Anyway, I think we've all written dumbass things as kids, hell, I wrote about why parrots rule the universe.

Hell, at least that sounds original.

Prometheus
07-29-2009, 08:21 PM
>>>>> Yawn <<<<<

Phoenix
07-30-2009, 10:34 AM
Yes, there's more. Mostly unfinished drivel.
You know what, I'm not even going to bother with the grammar on this one, you people can make fun of that yourselves.


Well you ever had one of those days wehn you wake up and you're surrounded by your worst enemy and his new army that you had no idea about? For me this was one of those days.
Hmm....
Well, you ever had one of those days whhere you wake up and you're stranded on top of the Brooklyn Bridge? For us, this was one of those days. Yep, no similarity at all.

So as soon as I woke up I imediately flew up into the air or at least I tried to. Then I went to my second move, intangibility, it worked I came flying up through the shackles of that rather unconfterable marbe bed.
How do you "go" to a second move? Perhaps you mean to say you tried plan b? And really? Intangibility. Who gave you special permission to defy the laws of physics?

I start yelling at MEGAZACH but he has no idea what I'm saying because it was in Demosian, then I realize that I was speaking Xenonian and open a compartment in my lag and take out a shiny doughnut shaped disc that reat "English for Demosians"
First off, what exactly are Demosions, and why do Demosians speak Xenonian? Does that make the slightest bit of sense? No. I believe you're trying to say Dashonian, who speaks Dashonian. Of course, that comment will probably confuse someone on here who will probably ask if Dashopia is some new planet I've devised in my head. The answer to that is no; Dashopia is the earlier name for Xictillis.

Then I pop it into a drive on my arm band computer and start talking English.
Arm band computer? Really? Did I mention it's connected to my brain? And, I know I said I wasn't going to bother with grammar, but I'm too much of a grammar nazi to let this one slide. SPEAKING! Speaking English you imbecile.

I then said "why you little piece of (your favorite expression here)"
Insult moron, insult.

"Domion Zorphite Menthos!"
Which means what? Could this be related to "Azarath Metrion Zinthos" used by Raven from Teen Titans? Possibly.

And after saying that a huge ball of a mix of lava, acid, laser cannon destroyer fluid,
We interrupt your regularly scheduled disgrace of a sentence to impose the question: "WHAT THE GOD DAMN MOTHERFUCKING SAM HELL UBER-FUCK IS LASER CANNON DESTROYER FLUID????"

lead, X79 bombs (which wil pull his brains out)
What bombs? Aren't those the hypothetical pea-size bombs I came up with which tunnel into a planet's surface, expand to the size of the core, condense the core, then jet back out into space?

spit, fire, lighter fluid,
Becuase lava won't ignite lighter fluid.

leaking batteries
You have to give points for originality in this case, even if the idea is retarded.

etc, etc, etc.
wtf, wtf, wtf?

Which I threw at him.
Again, my inner Grammar Nazi shouts: That, my idiotic friend, is a prime example of a sentence fragment.

And MEGAZACH is like "Oh dang!" So it gets over to him and what looks like kills him as far as I know but then unkowingly to me because I had already flown outta there to go to Operation Anti-Evil headquarters on the planet phanon to check out the status of the evil population that MEGAZACH had been ressurected by his new army.
Looks like kills him, as far as I know, unknowingly. Redunant-like redundant redundancies. Also, wtf is this OAE bullshit? Who starts something like that? And why isn't Phonon capitalized? Where exactly is Phonon? What does it look like? No one fucking knows because this is some horrible shit. Also, "evil populatiion that MEGAZACH had been ressurected by his new army."? What is this? The army of decay from the first season of Winx Club?

So I get over to Operation Anti-evil and find out that there is a bunch of freaky looking soup-like who-knows-what on the ground. So I pull out my hazordus (or what looks like hazordus)materials ray and scan the matierial and it happens to be MEGAZACH'S evil mutation meta-bacterial primoridal soup.
At this time I can't even spell matierial right after I just had, but I know what "meta-bacterial primordial soup" is? Riiiiight.

Number 999 on the hazordus materials list. So I whip out my brand new squeaking clean vacuum that sucks up everything
Take that Dyson.

So I set it to number 999 on the hazourdus materials list and set it to clean up the whole dang planet. I try to tell it to clean up the place but something happened. Right then one ugly loking dude jumps on me and I exampine his clothing thorugly and find out that he is really a crewmember from operation anti-evil. I guess in muted form has no idea that he has a reset button on his forehead.
Yea, gotta have that reset button, because unlike Space Quest 5, I don't have Drool to shoot the damn thing.

So I get out my unlimited power laser gun and fire at his reset switch, which returns him back to normal
Hmm...let's see how much bullshit I can pack into one sentence.

Then I say "what happened here?!?""They came through the shuttlebay. It was a giant army led by the one named MEGAZACH."
Damn. MEGAZACH knows about my top secret secure military installation.

The strenght of their army was too greate without a commander like you."
Man am I a concieded fuck. I couldn't command a team of zombies.

Anyway we go on with this story for what seemed like an eternity. After that I told the vacuum to start cleaning up the whole dang planet. Then the whole planet is freaky-looking soup-like-who-knows-what free. "And which planet exactly am I on? this doesn't look like Undumar!"
Well damn, what happened to Phonon?

Just then a giant riosniffinscoff jumps out of the air and bonks me on the head with plastic filled with acid thatburns through plastic or at least he tried to but being a nuts idiotic riosniffinscoff the acid burns through the plastic and through his hands. While this is happening I am being intelligent and scan the material and say "oh crud!" "Just then the blob of acid jumps on to the riosniffinscoff and sucks his brain out and then starts coming after mem, so very almost instantaneously whip put my freeze ray
Out of nowhere.

and put it in a deep freeze. "Alrighty then that way it can't hurt me, but just in case.""Computer activate shield 1401!" Then the computer on my arm goes "Shield Activated"

Personally, I think I've put enough of this bullshit on here to show how much it sucks.

aslan
07-30-2009, 08:24 PM
I used to write Harry Potter sequels when the first movie came out

yee-haw
07-30-2009, 08:26 PM
I used to write Harry Potter sequels when the first movie came out

Want to elaborate on them?

aslan
07-30-2009, 10:08 PM
Want to elaborate on them?

One was where Harry saved Hogwarts from poisonous jelly beans, and another was when Malfoy killled Harry with a sword

General Septem
07-31-2009, 06:51 AM
I wrote a Harry Potter sequel in which Harry kills Voldemort and all of his followers with a 2000 RPM chain wand and then has hot sex with Hermione. But I was intending for the part to be played by me.

aslan
07-31-2009, 07:44 AM
I wrote a Harry Potter sequel in which Harry kills Voldemort and all of his followers with a 2000 RPM chain wand and then has hot sex with Hermione. But I was intending for the part to be played by me.

LOL I was about 7 or 8 so mine were more foolish than action-packed...or sexy

WhiteRaven
07-31-2009, 07:58 AM
I wrote a Harry Potter sequel in which Harry kills Voldemort and all of his followers with a 2000 RPM chain wand and then has hot sex with Hermione. But I was intending for the part to be played by me.

I'm suing you for plagiarism.

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